Note: This Chapter is un edited and not beta'd as I don't have one. I needed to post this because I'm about three chapter's ahead and need feedback on any possible mistakes and plot holes I can't s...
this story has a really good plot and it has a great amount of potential good work :)
(#) torgrim83 2009-07-07 08:42:49 PM
Wow, that was hot with his sister. I hope things work out for them.
(#) pyrgus 2009-07-08 09:51:27 AM
You should put up the rest of the chapters right now. betaed or not.
(#) mohd7590 2009-07-08 09:56:51 AM
Please update, great plot, good romance. i hope Harry is powerful and gets a harem :)
(#) qiaoyech 2009-07-08 05:15:43 PM
Well... I think other than occasional spelling and grammar errors your story is fine. It's a bit too early to tell though. I can't judge a story unless it contains at least 40,000 words.
I hope there would be more sophisticated plots as the story goes on.