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something we do everyday...but this time something is different for me. please r/r! just try this poem...it might rock your socks off! :] (and yes this is about love, again).
- Aside from the need for punctuation, this leaves me...well, wanting more. It has some nice imagery to it, but little substance. "The wind slowly..." yet "the air rushes..." Kind of a contradiction here. There is little flow. And your ending just hangs there. Again, with some work, this could be very nice.
Thank you for sharing.
Author's responseThanks for the comment and suggestions!