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Holly Evans and the Spiral Path
(#) Minlawc 2009-11-21
I'm getting tired of Hermione, not of her character, but of your portrayal of her. It made sense that she was confused about her relationship with Holly while under the charm. Now it's just freaking annoying. I could never be a friend to someone so flighty.
"Hermione: "I... Y’know, I just suddenly realised that I cannot live like a nun for the rest of my time at school. Sex is too enjoyable for me to just stop doing it for the next few years. Chastity be damned; I want a boyfriend!"
Holly smiles, steps forward and slides her arm around Hermione's waist, guiding her into a slow stroll. Hermione turns her body to align with Holly's as they start to walk back towards the Burrow."
This is not funny, it's just stupid. Hermione seems to be just a feelingless sexual creature, ruled by her baser instincts and her weird faulty logic.Holly Evans and the Spiral Path
(#) wordhammer 2009-11-21
"just a... sexual creature, ruled by her baser instincts and her weird faulty logic" Aren't we all?
I'll admit this isn't one of Hermione's great moments, but the topic of conversation was relationships (which typically binds up Hermione more than any other) and I needed to move their friendship back into friendship finally. Part of Hermione's sexual hang-up was that no one but Holly had been sexual with her, so Hermione is now resolved to train her brain not to consider sex purely as a Holly-topic. Hermione's intrepid brilliance will return soon.
From Holly's side, she's willing to forgive Hermione for things no one else would be absolved for. Most of the rules in her head have a hidden addendum: '...except for Hermione.'
That, and Holly is convinced that the best way to get over sex hangups is to have sex. Holly believes Hermione is finally thinking clearly- abstinence is a sure path to insanity.
As a writer I'm still learning my swing, so sometimes what I'm trying to convey gets buried in the banter.
Thanks for reading, and most especially for your input. Reviewers like you are the best help a journeyman writer can hope for!
wordhammerAuthor's response
Sorry- this was meant to appear as a response to Minlawc, in the previous review. Eventually I'll work out how the technology is made to help us!
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