- You need a convincing reason why Tom wouldn't notify the ministry, which would eventually bring in Dumbledore and Harry would be returned 'for his own good'.
Maybe Tom does notify some magical equivalent of Child Protective Services, which puts him into magical foster care. There would be no strong reason to notify Dumbledore of such a thing, no matter his positions, since this would be a standard thing to do.. Dumbledore doesn't notice until the blood protections fail, and then it's a done deal.
Author's responseyou probably never got a chance to read the first draft I made of this story, but I put in that when Tom found Harry he had a Healer look at him and discovered he was suffering from massive malnutrition and was sickeningly underweight. Besides, a bit of background for Tom I intend to work in at a later date is that he himself was part of the magical equivalent of Child Protection Services and thus his decision to look after Harry himself. Harry will be adopted by another family some time soon and you will be surprised by who it is...
(#) longreachjones 2010-05-14Now THAT is what I call an opener! Very nicely done on this attempt.
RE: your plans for a writing style, as an idea, you may want to plan several chapters ahead, then flesh it out a chapter at a time, this way you don't get as many continuity issues as you might, at also helps somewhat with writer's block.
(#) jabarber69 2010-05-16interesting story, seems to be well written and it is catching your attention too, but why was he without footwear, seems to me in a house that is colder than sin cause of petunia adversion to a large fire in the fireplace then he should of been wearing some kind of shoes, at least you would think that now wouldnt you....
Author's responsecome on, it's the Dursleys we're talking about here, d'you think they'd let him wear shoes and socks? they'd be more inclined to make him try and freeze to death
- This looks like it could be interesting. I look forward to more of this story. :)
Hopefully this question will be answered in the next chapter, but I'm asking anyway, just to make sure you remember: Why doesn't Dumbledore send Harry back to the Dursleys? Does McGonagall explain to him that Harry shouldn't go to a family that would kick him out like that? Or maybe Tom doesn't tell Dumbledore or the Ministry.
Author's responseTom never told Dumbledore or the Ministry about finding Harry, but soon Harry will be officially adopted by a family and Dumbles will be unable to do a thing about it.
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