After the Second Task of the Triwizard Tournament, Harry wonders if Ron is truly the thing he'd miss most, and tries to sort out his feelings for a certain bushy-haired bookworm.
- Not a bad little story and you have set this up well enough for more than a few chapters. but you write what you want to.
I'll come back to read it for sure!
Author's responseI probably could stretch this out to the end of the year, with Voldemort's return and everything. But, since I already plan to do that with my other fic, Yule Ball Debauchery, I'm afraid it would become overkill, trying to write the same scenes two different ways.
(#) datbenik513 2010-06-30 02:09:53 AMHey there,
I was surprised to see you come up all of a sudden with this nice little story. I need to admit that every single piece of emotion your characters display here is very truthful, realistic, valid. It could have happened in canon.
I guess Jo had been receiving these questions as to getting H and Hr together so often that she and the filmmakers felt the urge to underline in HBP on more than one occasion that H and HR are simply FRIENDS.
It's always refreshing to read literately written stories here. Yours is one of them; no matter the nitpicking, I couldn't find any grammar errors. There were a few cases where I wasn't sure about punctuation; not being a native English speaker myself, I'll wisely keep my mouth shut :D
So, I hope you will expand it some more as I'm longing to see:
- whether they admit their feelings to themselves
- whether they admit their feelings to each other
- whether there's a chance for some subtle Weasley bashing :D
Anyway, good story and update soon. BTW, what about Yule Ball Debauchery? given up on that one? Please don't!
Author's responseGlad you liked it. I wanted it to feel as if it could have really happened at that point in the canon, so it's good to hear that you felt that way.
I agree; I think Rowling went out of her way to squash talk of H/Hr in HBP. (The result being Hermione acting rather OOC, in my opinion.)
I'd be surprised if there weren't a few grammatical/punctuation errors in there. I wrote, checked over and submitted the chapter within 24 hours of coming up with the idea, so I'm sure a few mistakes got through. Especially since I'm writing without a beta.
I think Hermione, at least, has already admitted her feelings to herself. She tries to fight it, but she's well aware that she has fallen for Harry. Harry's a bit slower on the uptake, so we'll see if he gets there on his own.
Will they admit their feelings to each other? Well, I think most of the people reading this would throw rocks at me if I didn't provide some sort of resolution by the end of the story, so make of that what you will. :)
I don't plan to go out of my way to bash the Weasleys. I don't really hate any of them, aside from maybe Percy. Ron grates on my nerves at times, but I don't actively dislike him. Ron might not be portrayed in a great light in this story, but that's not definite. I haven't really decided how he'll react to his friends' changing feelings, or if he'll even show up again in the story. We'll see.
I haven't given up on YBD, but it's pretty slow going right now. The main problem I've discovered is that I'm more interested in writing plot than smut--but I've kind of backed myself into a corner, as I think by now people expect smut in every chapter of that story. Chapter 5 is pretty well complete, aside from the smut, so hopefully it'll be posted in the not-too-distant future.
(#) helsingknife 2010-06-30 04:27:30 AMYeah,nice idea for a story.I've read some fics like this one on ff.net,but they weren't set in the 4th year.So,march on.
Looking forward to the next chappie.
Author's responseI'm relieved that, at the very least, the idea hasn't been done all that much. Hopefully I'll be able to differentiate myself from any similar stories by the end.
- It's a good start to a nice little story; I can see at least one chapter more (where they admit their feelings to each other) and perhaps one more after that as they deal with the fallout and reactions when they go public with their relationship. It does not -have- to have Weasley-bashing, or at least bashing of all the usual Weasleys (I think Ron is inevitable, but Ginny is not, tnough Mrs. Weasley might well be), but I can't see it not having some. Beyond that, the reactions of the various Slytherins would be amusing as well as any others who were hoping to "snag", and snog, Harry as well as any who might be interested in Hermione after seeing her at the Yule Ball.
Author's responseAt this point, I'm thinking it'll be three chapters total. Then again, I initially said Yule Ball Debauchery was just going to be a one shot, and that one will probably wind up at around 7 or 8 chapters when I finish it 15 years from now. So, perhaps I shouldn't try and predict the length of this fic.
If any Weasley will come across badly in this story, it'll probably be Ron. I think I'll have to address his reaction to this, one way or the other. Ginny will probably get nothing more than a passing mention. Since I try to sort of blend my stories into the canon, Mrs. Weasley won't be making a physical appearance unless I stretch this out to the end of the year, when she came to Hogwarts to support Harry during the Third Task. However, there's an incident from canon I'll be mentioning in Chapter 2 that might bring her reaction to "Harmony" into this story, even if she won't actually be at Hogwarts.
Your comments about seeing the reactions of the Slytherins, as well as others who may be interested in Harry or Hermione, have given me some ideas that may well be incorporated. So feel free to pat yourself on the back.