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Harry recieves his inheritances
- Hmm, I wonder if Harry retained his parseltongue abilities after defeating Tom? That could make for an interesting discussion with the basilisk when they visit the vault; Harry could end up with a very special protection on his vault. I wonder how Albus will take the news of the relocation of Harry's vaults as well as a new and very frosty attitude toward him on the part of the goblins?
I'm glad that Harry & Fleur are making progress on developing and adapting to their bond. It bodes well for their mutual future as well as the future of the Veela as a whole. I'm sure James Potter thought about that as he and Lily left their wills.
- Very nice story. Here's the flamethrower. Your language skills are not quite up to par. I'll get back to that. You need more spacing in the text. You have sections so packed with letters that it becomes hard to read. The occasional hit on the
will improve the reading greatly. Story-wise there are a LOT of clichés, but i don't really mind.
Normally i skip stories with the amount of typos and errors found in the first chapters but this one was too captivating to leave.
Good going, and keep at it. I want to see the rest.
- I will be completely honest. I normally don't like betrayal fics, because they all have practically the same cliche theme to them. Somehow, though, you seem to have made this interesting.
Just thought you should know that Harry would actually be about 38 percent Veela, but then I'm a nerd, so I would foolishly take the time to calculate something like that.