(#) Kid_Vicous 2011-04-25“I hadn’t thought of bring clothes” should either be “I hadn’t thought to bring clothes” or ”I hadn’t thought of bringing clothes” and "Or would I receive more from dad for telling" needs a question mark. Otherwise, good chapter again. But for the love of God, please stop putting things in bold! It's a little cheesey and very annoying. Use italics to exaggerate words. Please.
Have a cookie for adding "Common People". That is a great song.
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