(#) Kid_Vicous 2011-06-282 words: Mary Sue.
The writing wasn't bad but there are a lot of errors grammatically speaking. Letters need to capitalised, spelled correctly, etc. I'll keep reading but the main character seems slightly clichéd at the moment. I like your description of the characters, though.
Author's responseThank you very much I'll take that in mind next time.
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