Leonie proves to be something, but Archie's competitive side is dominating and he is convinced that she is under Cronus' control. A rematch is called to prove her innocence--a rematch that ends in ...
(#) heather 2006-06-25 04:43:12 AMthat was really long but good none the less i cant wait for more.
Author's responseSorry it was so long, but A. it took me three weeks to get that finnished so I wanted a double lenghth character for you guys and B. I'm awful at wrting short stories. Hopefully my next update will be sooner--the holidays coming up are a sure prospect of updates ;) I'm glad you enjoyed that!
(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-06-25 08:24:05 AMARCHIE!!! Update soon, now you really have my attention. VERY GOOD!!!
Author's responseI agree--ARCHIE!!! I'm glad I have your attention. I know he's kinda invincible, but have you ever seen one of those playgorund stumps? The egdes are so sharp they're a shftey hazard. peers at your works Wow, he's your favourite character isn't he? He's pretty popular! OMG!! Thanks, you really thinks I'm "very good"? struts around, crashes into computer desk and ends up with maroon rosebuds in hair--my Mum puts them there
(#) Allie 2006-06-25 02:18:18 PMThis is such a cool story, I think it's really origional and very suspensful. You've captured the character of Archie perfectly.
Author's responseWow...thanks. I know he's very competitive, so I try to make him kinda, for want of a better word, blinded by his desire to win. Since when has Archie thought logically when he was scared, worried, beaten, hurt, angry, or veangful? (sp?) Omyg, original and suspensful?!?!? My stories?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!? kneels over and faints from shock and happiness sobs into Neil's arm she's so touched Neil: GET AWAY FROM ME!!! You'll ruin my complextion! yanks arm away
- Natural Way of Things, it's called the Nature of Things, if I recall. Awesome job! Although I highly doubt a new girl would be able to beat Archie, but hey, your story! What will happen to Archie next? The suspense, the action...hope you update soon!
Author's responseOops...ta for fixing that. I guess I'm not geood at rememering thing like that T_T But, I can remember everything else, go figure that one out! XD Lol
pokes tale If you were that eager to beat someone, you would. Meep. I dunno if a new girl could beat him either, but the way my plot's going, it will come clear in a while.I hope I update soon too!
- I do love this story, but I would like to say that the prophecy only calls for seven. Is there another part of the prophecy that we don't know about? Is she by any chance related to a lycanthrope? Archie seems a bit out of character even though he is a sore loser, I can't see him accusing a newcomer of siding with Cronus. And the guys even pointed out facts to prove she wasnt. And usually he listens to reason.
I love this story and hope you update soon.
Author's responseI'm glad you love it. As for the prophecy, youll find out soon...for now, let's just say Cronus isn't an idiot, he knows about reverse pschycology. I don't even know what a lycanthrope is. O_o Does he? I can't see him getting beaten by a new guy, especially if the new guy is a weird girl nerd, and listening to reason. If Atlanta or Jay or someone beat him, he might have. A new girl who looks like she spends 99.99% of her life with her head in a book? Not the Archie I'm familiar with!
I'm glad you like it and hope I update soon too. I'm very unpredictable with my update times!
(#) kitkat 2006-06-28 10:33:10 AMcool story, kinda is similar to one I'm writing but wont be out yet for a long time, it's about a girl named Sasha who joins them who has glasses and blonde hair and is kinda a loner and likes reading. It's fun to write cuz I'm giving Sasha my personality and attitude and stuff, cept she has family/friend problems. plzz update.
poor Archie my love
Author's responseThanks. Yeah, I guess you could say Leonie is based on me too. She has the same social problems that I do. T_T I'll update, although I don't know when.
He'll be all right. I should know, I'm the one writing this story T_T
(#) crazy_reviewer 2006-06-29 06:29:00 AMmy Archie is hurt, I must save my Archie
darts inside telephone box
DUN DUN DUN
bursts out of telephone box in superman outfit (girl fitting)
I MUST SAVE ARCHIE!
flys off into the distance
remembers its a fanfic and begins flying in reverse
Loved the story! Oh, and it is The Nature Of Things (one of my all time favourite episodes)
Once again loved it, please save Archie, he still has so much to do in life, and I cant list them yet because I might be running out of room, also I love the new person, except why do the shoes have to be leather??
Author's responsenodnod You must save your Archie...yers...looks at audience Coo-koo! Whistles Spins finger round ear
I'll change it...I know I know...sigh
Glad you loved it!! I'll save Archie, geez all of you think it's some sorta fatal wound or something. It's just a cut in the forehead, and on Archie no less! Oh well. And there is no way on this EARTH you can run out of room in a review box, cause it's expandable. The shoes have to be leather because she's not wearing joggers and plastic Mary Janes are just--5-year-old-girl kinda thing. So, therefore, it has to be leather...anyway my shoes are leather and let me tell you, it's really comfortable. nodnod