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Breakdown
(#) fyre_byrd 2006-06-09
I really love the way that Tidus tries to run afterYuna to help her, to save her from a huge scary fiend, but really she's just running the Gunner's Gauntlet.
Yuna's job as a digger in Bikanel Desert is another wonderful thing to use to show Tidus that Yuna just isn't quite the same as she used to be. I really enjoy the way she defends herself so much, the way she won't back down about what she wants to do with her time.
I think that you definitely chosen the best difference to be the breaking point in their relationship. Given how Tidus feels about blitzball it must kill him to be pushed out and made obsolete in that arena as well.
I really enjoyed this exploration of what might have happened to Yuna and Tidus' relationship due to the changes in Yuna's personality. You make some excellent points about their possible incompatibility. I really enjoy the activities of Yuna's that you choose to emphasize as making her 'different.' I'm not sure that I can actually see Yuna being as cross and annoyed as you made her, but I appreciate that it could happen to anyone no matter how sweet and caring after awhile.
I found this a very interesting read.
Nitpicking:
"Two years changes thing, haven't you noticed that yet?"" Replace "thing" with "things."
"And I will not releasing Brother from his contract unless he wants to go." Add "be" before "releasing."
"It all started when I saw that sphere I thought was you."" Yuna didn't think that Tidus was the sphere. So maybe change this to "when I saw that person in the sphere, who I thought was you" or something.
""But, if you haven't, I would have stayed in the Farplane forever."" Replace "haven't" with "hadn't."
One other nitpick and this is a bigger one. You really use a lot of italics in this story. It sort of distracts from the story itself after a point. I think that using italics ocassionally for emphasis is a good choice, but using them to excess just makes them lose all meaning.Breakdown
(#) helluin 2006-07-03
Ouch. Very plausible, and an interesting angle to take. Tidus' relationship to her before was her guardian and hero, and now she doesn't need one, so... er... he's a little extraneous. All the little scenes showing this are so effective. I like the detail that Tidus notices her hiding in the waterfall on slippery footing.
Tiny nitpick: Gippal in the game was very adamant that Yuna was no longer High Summoner and that people should stop taking advantage of her and running to her with their problems. He hired her because she said that's what she wanted to do. "Okay, fine, knock yourself out." He had the Al Bhed irritation with exploiting Summoners, apparently. It's a minor point... a slight readjustment there could reenforce the point you're making, that Yuna's digging because she enjoys the work and getting paid for it, instead of just being expected to sacrifice for others' sake. :) The nail-in-the-coffin on blitzball is definitely a poignant way to show they're no longer eye to eye. A thought: Yuna understood Tidus well enough that I imagine she'd realize how hard it would be for him to be fired, and be angry at him for forcing her into a situation where she had to do that.Breakdown
(#) eowynjedi 2006-07-12
Bittersweet, but good. The sequence of events that starts with Tidus wanting to 'rescue' Yuna from the Gunners' Gauntlet progresses very believably, and the last scene when they're in bed together is excellent--I like the way you used the "it all began..." line in a more negative way.
It's definitely an interesting take on how the changes in Yuna would affect the relationship.Breakdown
(#) eowynjedi 2006-07-12
Bittersweet, but good. The sequence of events that starts with Tidus wanting to 'rescue' Yuna from the Gunners' Gauntlet progresses very believably, and the last scene when they're in bed together is excellent--I like the way you used the "it all began..." line in a more negative way.
It's definitely an interesting take on how the changes in Yuna would affect the relationship.
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