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We Killjoys are a FAMILY and we UNITE!!!

by lalalalaMCRlalalala 3 Reviews

NEW STORY!!! killjoy fanfic!!!

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Drama,Fantasy,Romance - Characters: Frank Iero,Gerard Way,Mikey Way,Ray Toro - Published: 2012/02/17 - Updated: 2012/02/18 - 1104 words


  • We Killjoys are a FAMILY and we UNITE!!!

    (#) xxPanicFanxx 2012-02-18 12:10:23 AM

    It's really good, but just a few things. Ok this is probably gonna come off really bitchy and I hope to god it doesn't. I promise this was NOT meant to sounds mean at all.
    *Spaces after periods, commas, etc.
    *When someone talks, enter (if that makes any sense) it'll look something like this:
    "Hi" I said.
    "Hi" They said.
    *Capitalize names
    *Don't use so many run on sentences (ok that sounded really bitchy but I promise it wasn't meant to some off that way) put periods, commas, hyphens, etc.
    *It's ok to cuss on here, everyone else does.

    Other than that it was great! Update soon, yeah? :)

    Author's response

    thank you that was really helpful and youre totally right it was just i was in a hurry so yeah thanks! great advice :D
  • We Killjoys are a FAMILY and we UNITE!!!

    (#) TERRIBLETEEN 2012-02-18 12:41:46 PM

    Thank you! this is so me its not even funneh and im fairly sure a have a bra holster somewhere :DDDDDD lawl this is awesome sauce :D good job and as my sister Falcon_Dance says
  • We Killjoys are a FAMILY and we UNITE!!!

    (#) Mikeys_Glasses 2012-03-02 07:00:12 PM

    Yeah, I kinda agree with Panic up there. You really need to work on grammar and dialogue, but other than that, you have a good storyline going!

    Keep writing, And I'm sure you'll get better and be AMAZING. :)

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