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Teddy Bear Blues

by BendersBreakfast 2 reviews

A Devil is given an assignment to seduce some good christian teens into a life of sin, if he fails he will be demoted into cleaning toilets for disgusting imps. Little does he know that there is a ...

Category: Humor - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Humor, Sci-fi - Published: 2006-06-27 - Updated: 2006-06-28 - 3099 words - Complete

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Teddy Bear Blues

(#) Ithilwen 2006-06-30

You have some minor grammatical errors. A lot of your quotes are run-on sentences. Periods and commas go before quotes, not after.

Heh. Baal finally gets mentioned. As long as no one says "suck my Baals,"
I'll be good.

Heh. More later.
Teddy Bear Blues

(#) xtearcatcherx 2006-10-25

Ha ha! I loved it :D Lol Mr. Duck :P

Keep it up :P

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