The man in the blood-soaked shirt and the screaming eyes didn’t look like a murderer. But then again, what did Frank know about murderers?
(#) scarlett_fitch2027 2012-03-31 10:31:52 AMYusss first review!! >:D I get way too much joy from the little things.
Anyways, yeah, this is incredible. I love it to bits and it's only the third second chapter. Writing is descriptive but not overdone, Frank's character is totally relateable while Gerard's is intriguing. I can't wait to read his side of the story, I bet it'll rock just as hard.
Keep going! This is already on my favourites :)
Author's responseThank you so much! :D I really value your opinion 'cause you're a really great writer :L I missed a little bit out with the bit about Gerard on TV, sorry- it's up now if you want to check it out, but it's not particularly relevant, I guess.
Thanks so much for supporting my stories, it means a lot :D
(#) LanaKrueger 2012-03-31 10:56:39 AMAmazing! When I was reading this chapter, I felt like I was there, in Frank's house, watching TV with him :] You're so talented and creative, the members of MCR would be proud of you :]
Author's responseThank you so much, that's such a huge compliment!
(#) FabulousRevenge 2012-03-31 11:31:41 AMAgh! Why is everything you write so damn good? I wasn't sure if I'd like this at first; I know its quite different to your usual stuff, but after this chapter I already love it!!! Seriously, you're incredible, I don't know how you manage to keep three brilliant stories with such different plots all going at the same time! Like LanaKrueger said, My Chemical Romance would be proud :)
~ Abigail Eve
(#) mychemicalbitchbot 2012-04-01 07:26:03 AMI did like it, quite a bit. (It's too early in the morning for me to be hyper about anything, sorry.)
I think that there was emphasis on certain points that made it beautiful butARE YOU HAVING A LOVE AFFAIR EIH THE WORD BEDRAGGED (or whatever that word was...)?!? You used it like seven times in the previous chapter and a bit in this one too... For what it's worth, I think we need a new word. (Eh... Yeah.) and it's/its got a bit messy.
Eh... Sorry it's not a sunshine review, but I think you're a great author and those little mechanics improvements could make reading just that much easier, make you just that much better. (see? I'm not just a bitch it's constructive! Um... Sorry bout that.)
Well, I do really like the story and am eager to see where it goes!
Author's responseThanks, glad you liked it (:
And yes, yes I am having a love affair with the word 'bedraggled' ;D
I think that's a bit of an exaggeration- I know I used it a couple times in the first chapter, but I did edit that. And I only used it once in this...but yeah, I get your drift- sorry!
Thanks, I do appreciate constructive criticism (: Will update soon!
P.S. Where were the it's/its so I can fix them? I looked through and only spotted one.
(#) aweirdtree 2012-04-01 10:05:43 AMoh goddammit fucking shit - this is just amazing. it's just so, so... i can't even -
GAAAAAH, THANK YOUUUUU!! so fucking much!!
...krhm, yeah. sorry, went a bit hyper - but, seriously, this stuff is purely awesome. i enjoyed reading it so much that i was practically jumping up and down on my chair, lol - am so glad no one couldn't see me (hopefully). your writing is fucking amazing in this story and the plot is just sucking me in, i want to know more, goddammit! :D so please, update soon if you can (: