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What I Want

by DisenchatedDestroya 3 Reviews

"At least now you can’t play with my head." Feedback hugely appreciated. :)

Category: Poetry - Rating: G - Genres: Angst - Characters:  - Published: 2012/04/14 - Updated: 2012/04/14 - 226 words - Complete


  • What I Want

    (#) tortillachip 2012-04-14 08:52:25 AM

    This is amazing! I can't stop thinking about the lines about the inside scars. Sure, of course a lot of people are really hurt on the inside if they cut themselves, but I've never thought about it that way before. I guess if it ever came up I would think about the actual process, and not what was happening to the person to make them want to cut. I really liked that line. I also really liked the last part. That was very powerful and carried a lot of emotion. Overall, this poem was very strong, interesting, and had me thinking the whole way through. Great job!!!

    Author's response

    Thank you very much! I'm glad that the lines made you think. A lot of people just think it's mindless cutting, just slicing away when that isn't the case at all; it's a very psychological thing.
    Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :D
  • What I Want

    (#) snake56tongue 2012-04-14 11:18:58 AM

    This was incredibly emotional and amazing :)
    I agree with tortillachip, the part about the inside scars was very creative and meaningful :)
    I also really liked the part about 'my last breath' and how you were saying how the person (that you are directing this poem too) wouldn't actually care.
    Very beautiful, well done :)

    Author's response

    Thank you! :D
    I'm super pleased that the inside scars thing got through alright.
    Thanks for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! :D
  • What I Want

    (#) CatscanFlyy 2012-04-15 03:22:39 AM

    Fuck yeah three cheers for teen-angst-poetry! This was particular awesome and kinda moving!

    Author's response

    Thanks! :D

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