Wherein Dumbledore plots, Harry counter-plots and other neat things happen.
(#) OrionLuckyStar 2006-07-07 11:17:08 PMI love it... and im glad that you gave the translation of the Longbottom famly credo at the bottom 'cause i was looking at it going... what on earth does that mean? ... but the ending got me a little confused... did harry go with just remy on a vacation, or was sev with them or did harry remy and sev all go to sevs manor? im a little lost there... and who's side is moody on? any who up-dates soon!
Author's responseAll three are at Snape Manor. The supposed vacation is a prank on the Order. Moody is on Moody's side for now. We'll see which way he goes as the story progresses.
(#) Lira_Snape 2006-07-08 03:59:14 AMWow, that story is quite original and exciting.
Please discount the review I left for the first chapter, concerning the spacing between lines. I had only looked at the first chapter then and was somewhat frustrated by my eyes hurting. I hadn't seen that you already had worked on it for the other chapters.
Two minor things I noticed: sometimes the html for single letters is off and shows as "&8023;" or something like this instead. You might want to check into this. Also you keep misspelling "Occlumency" and "Occlumens". While it's nothing major (and other than that your spelling and writing style is very good), it keeps jarring me out of the story.
I'm glad to have Severus and Remus as mentors for Harry and the Ministry-crew as true to Harry. While there are a few good stories with manip-Dumbles and bad Ron & Hermione, I very much prefer stories with true friends. :)
Tom and Harry are allies now; please tell me it won't end up as Harry/Tom. I really, really abhor the very idea of this pairing and if it is, I'll stop reading now before I get squicked out. I can deal with nearly every other pairing.
Anyway, hope you'll update again soon! :)
Author's responseThe funky "&8023;" is a formatting issue that I have to comb through the story for every time I upload onto Ficwad. Apparently it doesn't like Word 2003 as much as it did the older version i was using. I do try to edit all of that out. Sorry if I missed one.
As far as the Occlumency/Occlumens thing goes, i looked on the Lexicon and could have sworn it was spelled the way I have been using it. I have, however seen the err of my ways, and will alter the spelling from here on out. Thanks for bringing that to my attention.
I can honestly tell you and everyone out there that this will NOT be a Harry/Tom slash story. That, however is the only comment I will make on pairings at this time.
- I really like this story and look forward to each addition. I like the way you have Harry's Friends helping each other as well as the Mind Healer's way of helping them. While reading the part about Arthur and his muggle items, I was wishing that he was real and that I could send him everyday muggle things now and then to keep him happy. Can you imagine sending him something as simple as a doorbell or can opener? What fun it would truly be! :)
Author's responseI'm glad you enjoyed it. :) I have always liked Arthur as a character.
- awesome chapter, by the way the Semper Fidelis part was very cool, you weren't a marine at one time were ya? anways very awesome chapter, I can't wait to read the next chapter, do keep up the excellent work and update soon please:):):):)
Author's responseI'm not a Marine personally (Uh-rah!!!), but several of my best friends are. Thanks for reading and reviewing!