I'm sick of this heartbeat. [Poem type thing. Please read and review?]
(#) Coffeeaddict98 2012-06-30 03:01:04 AMHi, I was going to review a few days ago but there was a problem with logging in. Anyway, this poem seems quite personal, and although I don't know what you were thinking when you wrote it I still find it relatable. It absolutely makes sense. I especially liked,''A wrung-out soul for sale-
But Fate’s the only buyer'' and I’m so sick of it all.
I am it all. ''
Those lines relly evoke an emotional response x
(#) LanaKrueger 2012-06-30 01:03:55 PM“There is no exquisite beauty… without some strangeness in the proportion.” - Edgar Allan Poe
I think that's why your poems, stories and lyrics are so beautiful: they have just the right amount of strangeness in them. This one's no exception, it's strangely beautiful and insanely honest. Good job, Lucy :]
(#) MCR_ROCK_RHCP 2012-07-02 04:38:12 AMAmazing. Spectacular. Brilliant. Pure genius.
Your poems evoke an emotional response in the reader and that is why they are so good. Well done :) xxx
P.S. where can I find the links to the real Well you can hide a lot about yourself?
Author's responseMeeep, could you say any more nice things?! :'D Thank you so much, I'm smiling like a total weirdo at the computer screen!
(#) DisenchatedDestroya 2012-07-11 04:40:48 AMI'm not entirely sure how you do it, but it seems that everything you write is something that I find extremely relatable. But not only is your poetry relatable (a great and impressive feat in itself) but it is also grabbing, well-written and original. I got a real sense of emotion from this, of desperation almost, and that just shows how much power you have over the words.
I think my favorite line was probably,
"A wrung-out soul undermined,"
because it was a very vivid metaphor and a really clever one at that.
Fantastic job! :D