From the lack of sleep and the bloodshot eyes to the nervous kiss and the butterflies, does this make any sense at all?
Are you sure you need practice?
I would say that was written realistically but I wouldn't know. :3 but as far as I could tell, it was awesome.
Some of it was really funny, and I liked it.
I will say that for me, I prefer no smut... I find it a good sign when an author can kind of just imply a sex scene really well.
Okay, but wait, is Rian gonna he pregnant? DID GERARD FORGET??? THEY SHOULD HAVE USED CONDOMS MIKEY JUST TAKE A BREAK FOR A WHILE YOU LITTLE SEX MONSTER
THEY SHOULD HAVE ABSTAINED FROM SEX
Sorry, I 'm all about abstinence ever since Ryan the Pushy Virgin. (In atomickilljoy's stories, she likes to write Ryan Ross as a pushy virgin who shoves his abstinence down people's throats... that sentence doesn't make sense and is ironic at the same time.)
Anyway, so glad you updated! Update soon!
Author's responseHaha I've only ever written one other full out sex scene. X.x Other than that I just always imply it because I'm just not that great at writing smut, and I USUALLY don't find it necessary. In this case it kind of is, and I wanted to write the reactions they had to each other. Sometimes that is good to relay, especially during sex when emotions are high. Plus, I've been wanting to try it out a little- and write some smut. It's just an attempt of sorts, at something... more risque?
Haha, thank you.
;) That's what Gerard is worried about, lol and part of why I wrote the entire scene- just to kind of explain how in to it they are when the act is forgotten about.
Haha and I did push it off on poor Mikey!
Really? Haha, I want to read some of that! That's funny. I didn't really write Gerard to be all too intent upon abstaining though he did kind of try.
Thanks for the review! Glad you kind of/sort of enjoyed!
(#) foreveryours 2012-10-15 11:56:39 AMI don't want to sound like all pervy when I say this but that was a good smut scene XD
But oh god! Is she gonna be pregnant like what?! Oh shit oh shit, her dad is gonna flip and hit her and maybe kill the baby which in turn makes Gerard flip and kill her dad. That's one way I could see it going at least.
Haha I could see it now
Gerard: "It's your fault she's pregnant!"
Mikey: "Why?! I didn't fuck her!"
Gerard: "But you took all the condoms! Seriously Mikey, you don't need 34 for one night!"
Oh man I love this story so so so so much, you just get every chapter perfect in it's own little way! :D Update soon please!
Author's responseHahaha, I appreciate it! I don't write it often, so that is very kind to hear.
But with this story, only time will tell.
Hahaha, that's so funny!
Aww, thank you so much!
(#) McrmyBVBparawhore 2012-10-16 03:38:45 AMI thought this was a pretty good sexy scene!...That didn't make me sound pervy at all...
Anyways, I thought this was a great chapter as usual, I love how protective he is of her :3
Please update as soon as you can, this story's fantastic!
Author's responseHaha, nah- not at all. I appreciate that! :D
Thank you! Yes, he's CRAZY paranoid. ;)
I definitely will try to!