(#) fatherfuckingmeese 2012-12-17I forgot to read the summary at the top haha :'D Oh. MYGOSH. That was so hot. I could just see it in my mind haha and loved the whole thing. It might be easier for me if you spaced the sentences apart but other than that it was really good. You should make a sequel. :3
Author's responseI may just do that!! A sequal sounds like a plan :) Thank you xo
(#) CarcinoGeneticist 2012-12-24I don't often read smut on here, but when I do, I ONLY DID IT BECAUSE I DIDN'T READ THE DESCRIPTION.
But still, good work.
The thing that bothers me the most about this would be a lack of commas and apostrophes. But then again, you've come at a bad time for that. I am honest to God THIS CLOSE from snapping completely and going into a screaming rage at somebody who uses the wrong your in a sentence.
im. Not im. Never im. IT'S I'M. I AM. ARGARAG. You missed a question mark at the end. So that's really good.
Yes, your grammar is driving me insane. But I'm just one person, and others seem to like it, so my opinion shouldn't matter much. Those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind, right?
Did I read the sex parts? Nope. Why? Don't like the pairing. Does it bother me? Nope. I ship Gerard/Lin-Z. Because I'm a total shipping purist although I've still got Jimmy/Lin-Z because those two are so dang cute together.
Other than that, content-wise, there's nothing wrong with your fic. (You marked it appropriately. I'm just dumb.) The grammar's dragging it down a bit, and your prose is a bit iffy, but that's just nitpicking things, so don't mind.
Is Rambling. Will stop.
Author's responseI'm actually really glad you said that because I am atrocious with my grammar :) I do intend on correcting all mistakes but I did need that shove to sort it out so thank you so much. Also I never read a Jimmy/Lyn-Z fic so my curiosity is peaked xo
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