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Harry Potter's life after the battle turns out not like what he was hoping for. Completely AU and HP/DG
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After the Battle
(#) Chris7100 2012-12-08
Magic, it's clear that English isn't your first language. You actually have an interesting story here, but it's virtually impossible to read because of the language issues. Get yourself a solid Beta to scrub your grammar and diction and keep writing. Best of luck!After the Battle
(#) WHCnelson 2012-12-09
An interesting story until the very end. I don't think Hermione would turn to evil. But, hey. I really can't write either...After the Battle
(#) fuzzwu 2012-12-09
A decent story but you badly need an editor. Just have someone else read it before you post and that should clear up most of the problems.
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