(#) FrankIsMySexGod 2013-01-02:D If only you could see how wide my smile is right now. Whoa!!! Haha. I can't believe you actualy wrote this!!! It's amazing and you're the best thing ever in life ever!!! Haha YAY!!! Frank and I have a baby!!! :'D This was awesome and I loved it! Thank you so much! :D xx
Author's responseNo problem!
Glad to be of service!!
- They just can't keep their hands off each other.
Can I have one for me and Mikey?
Haven't thought of a pairing name...Amy and Mikey....mmmmm
I got two..
they'll be rubbish though but oh well..
Amikey or Mamy..
(#) HoneyImMagical 2013-01-02Since you want it...
It needs more detail. This will help add length and more imagery. For instance, maybe you could write a little bit about Frank's day at work, then lengthen out the before and during sex scene.
Also, a bit of better word choice would help :)
I hope you don't think I sound bitchy or something, it's just something I noticed.
Here's an example:
Author's responseyeah,I know I had to do that..
I only didn't do that cuz my parents could easily find out about this,and I'd get into trouble,cuz I'm 13 and stuff..
Right,I can remember that tip.Add more detail.Got it.
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