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Just One Drink Can Ruin Everything

by MCR-99 2 Reviews

All he said was just one drink, but he never expected to get this fucked up.. *Asking Alexandria Oneshot*

Category: Horror - Rating: R - Genres: Horror - Characters:  - Warnings: [X] - Published: 2013/06/30 - Updated: 2013/06/30 - 1192 words

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  • Just One Drink Can Ruin Everything

    (#) AmericanHorrorStory 2013-06-30 03:04:18 PM

    Okay, let me split this review up into the negatives and the positives.

    /The Positives:/

    -No self-insert, I like that.
    -Good use of lyrics.
    -Moral; good moral.
    -You know the songs.

    /The Negatives:/
    -I wouldn't exactly call Danny 'middle aged'. Middle aged is, like, 50-60.
    -'Boner pill' isn't the most eloquent way of stating the effects of the pill that she slipped him. You could've said something like 'sexual stimulant' or something like that.
    -AA are more a post-hardcore band.
    -Some of the language was a bit awkward.
    -Danny wouldn't know what she had slipped him.
    -One does not just get up and run out of an ambulance.

    If I had to give it a score out of ten, it'd be around a 6, 6.5.

    Author's response

    Yeah.
    I know the language was awkward as fuck, but I was panicking because I'd planned for this to be a two-shot but my mind was like 'no it shall be a oneshot'. And, with the fact he got up and ran from the ambulance, it looked like he did in the music video.
    with the 'boner pill', it was for comedy sake.
    And, to me, Danny looked middle aged in the video.

    major facepalm
  • Just One Drink Can Ruin Everything

    (#) Sam41 2013-06-30 03:24:13 PM

    Okay
    Once again I shall ask
    Since when did you actually like AA?! (No offence, but I lasted a semester with a friend who claimed to like every band I did. Even if she knew nothing about them)

    I like it though
    Except the beginning is like a total written part to the video xd
    I like it though
    You're getting better at writing, by far

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