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• The Name of Love

  (#) Afuna 2006-08-07

  This is wonderful! One of the most interesting/refreshing stories I've read in a long time.
  
  The writing crisp, the pacing smooth, and the ambiance...ahh the ambiance.
  
  I'm not sure whether "gritty" is the proper term. Meaty? Real? With substance?
  
  I love how the scene changes with every chapter. More, I love how the mood changes with the scene changes. This is such a pleasure to read (and review!)
  
  I enjoy the asides and the descriptions are just right (in that way that is so hard to achieve, but is recognizable immediately when it's there).
  
  One thing -- four minor things actually -- I noticed several small mistakes/typos but given the overall quality of the work, these few were enough to snag my attention and pull me out of the story slightly.
  
  One: eluded (alluded) to an extensive family
  Two: on the lamb (lam)
  Three: Oh, where (were) they tempting
  Four: snuggly (snugly)
  
  Going back to the fic proper, this is going to sound strange considering how many good lines there are, but I especially enjoyed this line:
  "...wanted to know what the other shoe was going to be when it dropped."
  
  It's a familiar phrase, and you managed to add your own twist to it while still keeping the phrase recognizable.
  
  By the way, that pretty much sums up how I feel about the storytelling thus far. The words used are familiar everyday words, everything just flows neatly from one sentence/paragraph/scene to the next, and I'm so completely absorbed in reading that I barely even notice that I'm reading. But while it's a comfortable read, there are subtle twists and at no point do I feel that I've read the same thing before.
  
  Must stop talking. I'm actually in the middle of the chapter right now. I was (unwillingly) pulled out of the story, as I mentioned before, and I decided I might as well take a short break and write this. Need to get back to reading: guy with British accent has just come in -- looks like something exciting is about to happen!

  Author's response

  I... wow. Consider me speechless and flattered! I really didn't think this silly story was any of that, but this is possibly the nicest thing to wake up to ever. Thank you for picking out those silly typos. I'll run and fix them asap!
  
  Again, thank you SO much. This made my day! :D

• The Name of Love

  (#) Afuna 2006-08-10

  I'm glad you enjoyed how much I enjoyed your story! I figure if you enjoyed my review even half as much as I enjoyed your story, then it's all good grin
  
  On to the second part (I consider the theater as the second part, for some reason). Again, I really like the way you set the scene. Don't know how you do it, but the theater feels real and vivid in my mind. The little touches in the descriptions and the nuances in their expressions are just right, and are able to convey the scene without belaboring the point. (I especially enjoyed the line where he pauses before saying "Lucas")
  
  I also enjoy the little subtle hints that something is wrong, or strange, definitely not normal. The thing with the accents has made me more curious (not that I wasn't curious enough already!)
  
  Related to that (this should properly go as a review to the second(?) chapter), but I loved the way you handled the glowing people scene. It was dreamlike and surreal without being overblown. Loved the body language and how it was consistent throughout the scene. Just really well done.
  
  I also neglected to mention earlier that I like the way you handle the slight awkwardness in Dmitri's speech. It's just enough to give a hint of his foreign-ness without making it difficult to read. I enjoy Stella's voice as well.

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