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by Wallwalker 1 Reviews

Seifer meets his sorceress for the very first time, and sees his first Romantic Dream. (Surreal, one-shot.)

Category: Final Fantasy 8 - Rating: PG - Genres: Drama - Characters: Edea, Seifer, Ultimecia - Warnings: [!!] [V] - Published: 2005/06/11 - Updated: 2005/06/11 - 5539 words - Complete


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    (#) hojo 2006-05-08 07:23:21 PM

    Overall, I thought this was a very strong and original story. I loved your characterization of Ultimecia, and I thought your Seifer was very believable.

    As for writing children, I agree that it's really hard. There's a couple places where Seifer's monologue feels awkward -- most especially, to me, where he realizes how childish his dreams are. Not because he does so, obviously, but I think it's because of the way he describes them.

    On the other hand, I did very much feel that it wasn't all his thoughts, and I was glad to get to the note at the end and find out I wasn't reading too much into it. ^_^

    Mostly my advice on writing kids is just to let the voice be as clear as you can get it and then have a really good beta who's familiar with kids. Hope this helps, and I loved the story.

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