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Chapter 09.

by Popciclegirl 3 Reviews

Nikki throws a birthday party for Lilee. DAMN I WISH THAT COULD HAPPEN TO ME!!!!!!! Anyways. That a-hole shows up and...yeah.

Category: 30 Seconds to Mars - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance - Characters:  - Published: 2006/10/11 - Updated: 2006/10/11 - 966 words

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  • A Beautiful Lie

    (#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13 08:32:47 PM

    Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential.
  • A Beautiful Lie

    (#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13 08:35:25 PM

    Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential.

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