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Chapter 09.
3 ReviewsNikki throws a birthday party for Lilee. DAMN I WISH THAT COULD HAPPEN TO ME!!!!!!! Anyways. That a-hole shows up and...yeah.
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(#) nottheone 2006-10-13 08:15:10 PM
wow thats not the reaction i would expect from a fauther... cant wait till the next chapter!Author's response
Thanx. Just keep in mind he's 35 and she's 16. Buut thanx. The next chapter is coming soon. :D -
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(#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13 08:32:47 PM
Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential. -
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(#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13 08:35:25 PM
Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential.