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Night Slayer

In the Underland, Kai has never heard of the word 'demon', until she encounters one. Soon, she is revealed to her world's secret, and a certain vampire awakens her remembrance from a katana. Now, h...

Category: Fantasy - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Fantasy - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2006/10/14 - Updated: 2006/10/14 - 1300 words

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  (#) Reko 2006-10-14 01:54:33 PM

  wow this is great, good job
  and thanx for readimg my story :)

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  hey thanks!

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  (#) RenoTurk 2006-10-15 03:33:12 AM

  Are you going to write more cos that is really good!
  
  And thank you for checking out my story.

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  (#) Animefreak 2006-10-15 01:15:40 PM

  You moved her now?? What! What about fictionpress? Oh well. Update soon!

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  (#) Animefreak 2006-10-15 01:16:39 PM

  I get to review more than once, hey this is better than Fictionpress. ^_^ I am so random!

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  (#) MKay 2006-10-15 02:14:18 PM

  thanx for the review i know this might be a wierd question can u explain the space thing cause im kinda lost i am having a blonde day. and i love your story ur a really good writer i hope u update soon.

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  (#) herk444 2006-10-16 07:18:15 AM

  Very ineresting. I do hope that there is more to come. You do a lovely job with forshadowing, which I probably just spelled wrong.
  
  Thank you for reviewing my story, and also for favoriting it! As the kind young lady that I am I shall return the favor.
  
  I am anxious to find out what happens next!

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  (#) confuzzld 2006-10-16 10:05:05 AM

  ahh I rember this story ! It's a good story ! ::sigh:: itsn't ti sad that we all have to start over again because of fictionpress ? I think it is ::sigh::

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  (#) MadIsMyName 2006-10-16 04:03:30 PM

  I like it so far, but you'll need to do some major grammar work. The piece in general could do with a bit of editing and clarifying, but I got what you were trying to get across. You describe the scenes very well, but again, you need to fix the grammar up a bit to make your expositon more clear, and thusly more moving, spine-tingling, awe-inspiring, etc. Definately keep it up! I'll be looking for more of this in the future!
  
  -Mad

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  (#) LadyJones 2006-10-20 10:43:37 AM

  Interesting story, good first chapter :D

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  (#) LoveSnape 2006-11-01 08:55:31 PM

  Wow! Original and insightful! I must say, this is a great start to a promising story. Very intriguing, compelling. There are a few too many repetitions... do you have a Beta-reader? If not, would you like one...?

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