In the Underland, Kai has never heard of the word 'demon', until she encounters one. Soon, she is revealed to her world's secret, and a certain vampire awakens her remembrance from a katana. Now, h...
(#) Reko 2006-10-14 01:54:33 PM
wow this is great, good job
and thanx for readimg my story :)
(#) RenoTurk 2006-10-15 03:33:12 AM
Are you going to write more cos that is really good!
And thank you for checking out my story.
(#) Animefreak 2006-10-15 01:15:40 PM
You moved her now?? What! What about fictionpress? Oh well. Update soon!
(#) Animefreak 2006-10-15 01:16:39 PM
I get to review more than once, hey this is better than Fictionpress. ^_^ I am so random!
(#) MKay 2006-10-15 02:14:18 PM
thanx for the review i know this might be a wierd question can u explain the space thing cause im kinda lost i am having a blonde day. and i love your story ur a really good writer i hope u update soon.
(#) herk444 2006-10-16 07:18:15 AM
Very ineresting. I do hope that there is more to come. You do a lovely job with forshadowing, which I probably just spelled wrong.
Thank you for reviewing my story, and also for favoriting it! As the kind young lady that I am I shall return the favor.
I am anxious to find out what happens next!
(#) confuzzld 2006-10-16 10:05:05 AM
ahh I rember this story ! It's a good story ! ::sigh:: itsn't ti sad that we all have to start over again because of fictionpress ? I think it is ::sigh::
(#) MadIsMyName 2006-10-16 04:03:30 PM
I like it so far, but you'll need to do some major grammar work. The piece in general could do with a bit of editing and clarifying, but I got what you were trying to get across. You describe the scenes very well, but again, you need to fix the grammar up a bit to make your expositon more clear, and thusly more moving, spine-tingling, awe-inspiring, etc. Definately keep it up! I'll be looking for more of this in the future!
(#) LadyJones 2006-10-20 10:43:37 AM
Interesting story, good first chapter :D
(#) LoveSnape 2006-11-01 08:55:31 PM
Wow! Original and insightful! I must say, this is a great start to a promising story. Very intriguing, compelling. There are a few too many repetitions... do you have a Beta-reader? If not, would you like one...?