this is just a bit from a story i'm going to write called Painting of a Pomegranate. pretty much meant for herk444, cuz no one else will understand. but basically the story's about a painter who ...
- Woah. That was scarey. Like, really scarey.
Very well written however. The only problem that I could find were unclear brakes inbetween the perspectives of the person whom is with Ewen and the mother and daughter. Otherwise, kudos.
Author's responseyah, i fixed it now. i have no idea how to work that italics thing. i mean, i tried it, but then the whole thing was slanted....i didn't think it would be scary....okay, yes, there are suicidal thoughts....and vampires.....okay, i suppose it could scare some people. anyhowz, thanks for the review, herkie. maybe i'll start writing the actual story ^^
love ya back,