When would be the best point in time for an over-powered Harry to return to his past? Right before the First Task! In this chapter, Harry gets Luna and Ron dates, confronts Snape, and has an inte...
(#) jabarber69 2006-10-24 04:49:57 PMboy oh boy I sure wish I had someone like harry the champion escort service when I was that age, then maybe I would have gotten a date!
love what you did to snapey-poo, now we have to wait to find out what tall tale he is spinning to moody/crouch jr.
also why is everyone always cringing at luna, hell I think she is cute and smart as hell is a totally different way!
(#) foolishwandwaver 2006-10-25 12:01:21 AMJust great! as Tony would say. Truly Harry is standing up for himself and not taking very much of anyones crap. Although I do think Cedric wouldn't call Harry 'silly'. I think he would say something like" "You Know, you can be quite strange at times." And of course, Harry would respond with "you have no idea."
But, Like I said in another review, haven't read anything bad. I really enjoy all your stories. Keep on typing!
- Ooh! Now things are hotting up. Harry is, of course, laying a trap here but I am interested to see how it is going to be sprung.
Ron is... well... Ron. However, I think you deserve credit for finding a compromise to solve the issue of his jealousy (and those shudder robes). Those robes make me strongly suspect that Molly is an Austin Powers fan-girl. ;-)
The interaction with Snape was well done too. I don't think that Snape has really felt fear like that since Voldemort's first fall.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10
Author's responseHarry needs to spin a story that will insure that Voldemort really wants Harry's blood, and won't attack Harry in the castle.
- Why didn't Harry consider Neville for Luna? He's content to leave him for Ginny?
"The Patils can go with anyone they want", entertaining Harry. Heh.
I enjoyed the dialogue with Cedric, feeling as Harry did, that he was a good man who should be protected.
- I really love re-do stories. Although I usually don't care for 'Super-Harry', you have written this vey well indeed.
In this fic, Harry is old enough and at the same time young enough, combining both timelines, to safely persue a romantic relationship with Hermione, if you wish to do so. He has an intimate knowledge of the future, but unlike in some fics, has elected to divulge at least some of that knowledge to Professor Dumbledore.
His dealings with Ron, and the rest are considerably better than the way Rowling has written them. Ron is his best friend. Despite his tantrum in the first part of 'Goblet', Harry never deserted him. His offer to Ron on the basis of a business deal, is a nice touch. Ron cannot fall back on his image of the 'poor but proud waif', since he is expected to repay the loan. I really wish JKR had written something of the sort into canon. Ron wouldn't have looked so stupid.
His snagging the horcruxes, is a major departure from the usual, and his words of warning to Dumbles and later Snape, are moreso. (I dislike Snape intensely, so almost anything an author can do to make his life miserable, is OK by me.)
I will be checking this file quite frequently, and hope to read more. Alorkin