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Cloak and Dagger
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-19
i love how the beginning of the chapter went back and forth between how patrick was feeling and how collette was feeling, and how their emotions were pretty much parallel.
gah, and damn andy! usually it's joe who's interrupting. when did that become andy's job? haha
ugh, and she rejected poor patrick? i don't think he bought her excuse, he just saw a plain rejection.
i love the fact that you didn't give away all of her background. it keeps us in suspense and you know i'm a sucker for that. showing her getting defensive about her past means there is something huge there. i'm totally waiting for it.
at the beginning i wondered why jackson calls her "coco" instead of "mom", but i just now caught onto that. the photo album thing was a nice touch.
well, i guess we can thank joe for being such a pimp and getting wrens number. hopefully wren will put the OH in trohmania. hells yea.
anyway, i should probably sleep or something now....Author's response
I love your reviews! Especially the OH in Trohmania! Sorry it took me so long to update. I know you were waiting.
You are reading into this story very well, young one. You may be catching on to things that are important to remember for the future...maybe...ha ha ha (that's supposed to be an evil laugh, but since I am the "nice one" I'm not sure how to spell it)! Onward to Drama-Rama!Cloak and Dagger
(#) moocow 2006-11-19
i do that dramatic fashion thing every night
with the heavy sigh and everything.
and then i dream of patrick in a sailor suit.Author's response
A sailor suit?? Haven't had that dream yet.Cloak and Dagger
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-20
Thanks for the nice long update, very much worth waiting for ( wow, how poor was that sentence structure? ha! )
I'm excited about the plot that's bubbling under this story, you are weaving all the characters together and it's great reading, I can't wait to see where it's going.
I'm a sucker for the kids too and I love Jackson, the scene you set for him with Colette was perfect.
Continue....
pinches your cheek
Laters sweetness.
xxAuthor's response
I'm glad that you enjoy this story. I don't feel that people are liking this much as I Remember, but o'well, I suppose.
rubs cheek slightly
Smooches!Cloak and Dagger
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-21
Ah, that Austrian kid is one of the last ones to review. Damn her...
I very much enjoyed the parallel thoughts/ actions of CoCo and Patrick in the beginning, the "flirting" bit. Very entertaining. ;)
This was a looong chapter and that´s just perfect because the tons of dialog and quoting of thoughts works super for your great characterizations.
"Well, obviously I couldn't stay when you were leaving with a look that your puppy just died on your face," -> I had to read that twice because the first time I thought a puppy had died ON HER FACE. ;)
Blah, blah about Joe and Andy. Who cares about them? ;)Author's response
I've decided to have longer chapters because then my story won't be 30 chapters long...well, I don't expect it to be.
Yeah, that sentence you pointed out is kind of confusing now that you pointed that out. Ooops, can't win them all.
You rule...smooches!Cloak and Dagger
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-21
Also, is CoCo really Jackson´s mother? Maybe I wasn´t paying enough attention or forgot that already. And if so, please spank me... but I´m kinda having my doubts about this one...Author's response
It wasn't spoken yet...we will have to wait and find out now won't we....
Cloak and Dagger
(#) patricksgirl84 2007-03-09
Very interesting and exciting. Can't wait to read more!!
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