(#) KarmasMessenger 2006-12-07I am guessing by your delusional self-importance that you are most likely a teenager. You have a very egocentric attitude and are in constant need of attention in whatever manner you can receive it. Unfortunately, this shows in your writing. You may grow to become a good writer, but for now, you are stunted by your own arrogance. You have much to learn, yet I do not think you believe this to be so. Hence, you are inhibiting yourself as a writer.
Perhaps in a few years you will grow from this phase and actually improve. For now, unfortunately, your stories and poetry come across as very cliché. You, I am sure, see them as the most unique pieces in the world, which is a shame. They are banal and lifeless. In the future, I hope you are able to see past your own perceived greatness enough to create something original. For now, your stories are the same cookie-cutter teenage angst filled emo that every other low self-esteem driven teenager regurgitates and posts, believing it to be a true masterpiece.
Well, maybe in time you will outgrow this juvenile stage. I'm sure you will post a response which will only bolster my opinion, so please feel free to do so.
(#) MushroomCap 2008-06-14PARCD is probably the same person who wrote all the other reviews, the writing style is identical in each one. The give away was the complicated and higher level vocabulary that she (it is a female) probably used a dictionary to find. Since it is the same person, It is meaningless. And, most likely, when this person reads my review, they will post another review mocking me. Anyone want to bet that their retort will include the word 'whore'?
Btw, ....I didn't really like this story....too mushy for me...
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