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Chapter One

by wimvincken 4 Reviews

It does not go well with Harry Potter. In order to increase Harry's magical power, Dumbledore infects Harry and two girls with a disease. And his power surges.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance - Characters: Dumbledore, Ginny, Harry, Hermione, Lupin, Molly Weasley, Professor McGonagall, Ron, Sirius, Snape, Tom Riddle, Voldemort - Warnings: [X] [Y] - Published: 2006/11/27 - Updated: 2006/11/27 - 4169 words

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  • Magical triplet

    (#) caitsithff7 2006-11-27 05:16:14 AM

    great start with the story but I found a few things that you might want to look into. It might have been on purpose that you have sirius alive and them going into their seventh or sixth you have writen both ways. Some of the grammer needs work and a few missing words. Otherwise very well done.
  • Magical triplet

    (#) jabarber69 2006-11-27 02:46:56 PM

    Hey great story, love the whole ideal! I downloaded your story off of your website but your right it being not beta-ed I couldnt read it, it was so bad, so I guess I will just have to wait for each beta-ed chapter to come out.

    Author's response

    I agree that it needs to have a lot of work, this one. I am also rewriting some parts of it, especially the lemon scenes. They are truly disgusting and unsatisfying. Much too less.

    Now I have a more dirty mind, I am going to get my imagination loose at them. I can not publish those lemons on the FF.Net, but I can at FicWad.
  • Magical triplet

    (#) BenRG 2006-12-12 12:58:29 PM

    Just something that you need to edit:

    Not 'portions' but 'potions'. Use the find/replace function in your text editor.

    Apart from that, an interesting look inside the head of Mr. H. J. Potter and his view of the various girls close to him.
  • Magical triplet

    (#) BlackAngel 2007-02-13 12:58:09 PM

    Hey! Just 1 question... did you mean to say potions or portions? you might want to reread this ok? LOL peace

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