Neil is annoying the others and Jay loses his goody-goody image
(#) fluffypup 2006-12-25 08:16:34 AM
that was hilarious loved it
(#) greektitan 2006-12-25 08:18:50 AM
OMG!Lmao!That was so funny!Neil is such a big mouth!!!Hehehe~~!!Lol!I loved it when he was like
"Archie is the best warrior,but also has the tackiest hairdoo"LOL!Loved IT!!
(#) Ace_Fan_12 2006-12-25 09:41:34 AM
lmao! That was soo funny! lol I agree with greektitan! I loved that part too! Great story! Loved it!!:)
It was good, but it was confusing. Who the heck is Jayden? And what's with the phone call? What'd that have to do with the story? I'm confused.
My most sincere apologies. First of all, to know who Jayden is, you must read my other current story, Twins, which you can find either on my profile or the second page. Second of all, the phone call is just a little something i like to share with others. it did truly happen to me. i think starting off a chapter/story with something non realated can sometimes get the reader in some kind of mood. this phone call conversation prabobaly made some of you be more aware of idiotic callers who calls at 3 in the morning.
(#) Mrs-Jay 2006-12-25 05:17:30 PM
Great story, I think at the end Archie was bit jealous that Jay got to beat up Neil. Lol Neil nice lyrics, but you have some flaws too!
(#) hachoo 2006-12-25 05:39:49 PM
hehe... i love the ending! go jay!
(#) dana 2006-12-28 01:53:55 PM
that was totally halious!!!!!!!!!
(#) book-worm 2007-01-05 10:34:18 AM
Oh man that so funny!!!! GO JAY!!!
P.S. that must have been one annoying phone call
yah, tell me about it
(#) C.R. 2007-01-11 05:56:00 PM
Oh man that was sooo hilarious! Neil has to learn to keep his big mouth shut. I loved the lyrics and thought the end was really funny! Great work!
(#) puppy_palooza (not logged in) 2007-01-26 12:56:12 AM
that was soooooo funny when neil was singing bout his friends (even though there mad at him)