Harry gets a new identity and says goodbye to the Dursleys. *Reformatted*
(#) MasterKtulu 2007-02-04 03:19:59 PMAs of yet, your story is quite good and original. But the pirate accents (Or whatever they are) are a bit thick and could be toned down a bit. Also, some spaces between the paragraphs would make it much easier to read. I doubt that any of your readers would mind if you took a bit of time to edit your story with toned down accents and place some spaces where needed…
Author's responseThank you for reading and for writing a precise review, it was very helpful. Looking back I can see the accents are a bit thick, but having traveled throughout the U.K. I can tell you what I've written is mild by comparison. If I had written Moody with a true Scot's brogue the story would need a glossary for translation. I love Scotland, but I'm not sure that my cousins in Edinburgh are really speaking English. I'll try to keep that in mind for later chapters.