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Unguarded Moment

by Wallwalker 4 Reviews

General Caraway is given an opportunity to do the one thing that he believes will assure the future of Galbadia. However, taking it isn't so easy. (Newfic.)

Category: Final Fantasy 8 - Rating: PG - Genres: Drama - Characters: Edea, General Caraway - Warnings: [!] - Published: 2005/05/06 - Updated: 2005/05/06 - 2174 words - Complete

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  • Unguarded Moment

    (#) Sindeniirelle 2005-06-10 10:06:15 PM

    Wow...this is incredible, it is one of the most intelligent and well-written Final Fantasy fanfictions that I have ever come across. The entire concept is original and refreshing, and your writing is elegant, descriptive, and professional. The atmosphere was absolutely perfect: I felt Caraway's uneasiness and fear, and his conflicting emotions at the end...somewhere between guilt, regret, and longing...it was brilliant.

    Author's response

    Thanks very much. ^^
  • Unguarded Moment

    (#) fyre_byrd 2005-06-11 09:50:50 AM

    The idea that Edea might have lucid moments in her possession by Ultimecia is an interesting one and would have made her ordeal all the more painful no doubt. That was the most interesting part of the story, I found.

    The only real criticism I have is a small one, so I hope you'll forgive me. You abuse the ellipsis a little. The games themselves love to abuse ellipses too, really.

    Your characterization of Caraway is quite convincing and consistent. Caraway's concerns are mostly military concerns, but he has compassion as well, which finally makes him too weak to do the "right thing".

    At the same time I doubt that killing Edea would have stopped Ultimecia. Edea would have had to pass her powers on to someone else and then no doubt the cycle would have started again. It's just a thought.

    This was an interesting look at a character whose motivations are not often explored.

    Author's response

    Yes, I do have a habit of ellipsis abuse. I'm working on breaking it. laughs

    And while I'm not sure if killing Edea would have stopped Ultimecia, it might slow her down. and from Edea's point of view, she might be desperate enough to ask for death.

    Thank you for the feedback. It was a big help. grin
  • Unguarded Moment

    (#) hojo 2006-05-08 11:01:08 AM

    I liked this a lot. It has a solid sense of the setting, Caraway and Edea are both solidly present and well-written, and even though Deling doesn't actually appear, you made him a solid presence too. Well done.
  • Unguarded Moment

    (#) owlmoose 2006-05-10 12:38:11 AM

    A thought-provoking moment, well captured. I really felt for Edea here, trying to save the world in a lucid moment, and for Caraway, too, caught in such an impossible position.

    I always enjoy stories that fill in backstory, especially when they ring this true to canon, and this feels like something that could actually have happened in the background. Very well done.

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