(#) GryffindorDragon 2007-03-01'the slight menstruation on his part' -- Harry is having his period?
There are other examples where editing/proofreading would help:
'My aunt hardly whatsoever except for addressing which chores I should complete' -- hardly what? (talks to me? notices me?)
Also the story seems to belong to your other story (the references to the love potion, for example) but isn't connected to it specifically. Perhaps a line in the summary or an introductory author's note would help clarify the setting.
Aside from that I enjoyed reading this.
Author's responseThanks for pointing out the errors. This isn't connected to the other story. There are similarities to the other, but then again, there are similarities with all Harry Potter Fan Fiction Stories, are there not?
- What a great start to the story;
How could Ginny force Harry to love her be giving him, Amortentia.
I agree with Harry's Questions, I wonder about them too.
I like we see abet about Luna's past, it was well writen.
I can't wait to see what happens next, keep up the great work.
- Hmm! An interesting start to an H/L story. I rarely read these because people frequently get Luna wrong. I agree with your thesis that she is basically 'normal' (whatever that turns out to be for a half-fae witch & seer) underneath the crazy bohemian exterior which is mostly for her dad's benefit.
The interaction between Luna and Harry was well written and is all the more interesting because you make both of them compatible with canon instead of making up powers and abilities. I will be following this story to see where it goes.
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