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you can keep my brother
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-04-09
Great chap! Dont forget to include some history on your characters to make them more well rounded. Like obviously Sky is good friends with Mikey...but why not Gerard. Was he just like Mikeys older creepy brother all this time but now she sees him differently. You dont need to write a paragraph about it either, just a few refernces here and there. Like 'Oh I cant believe Im sitting here with Gerard of all people...we were never close...' Or have Gerard say something to her about how things are different. What makes a character likeable is knowing whats motivating them to do what they do. You know your character...the auidence dosent. Writing its the hard part! (seriously youre doing great-keep going!)Author's response
thank you for the great tips! i absolutely going to use them for the next chapters!you can keep my brother
(#) MCR_dynamite 2007-04-11
I love this story! Aw, that chapter made me smile in the 'Why can't Gerard hug ME?' way (if that's even possible!). Lol, that was quite sweet. I liked it!Author's response
Ohhh goodie!! that means I did something right if it made you feel something/smile.you can keep my brother
(#) rocker4lifeSAM 2007-06-20
aaawwwwwwee!!i dont htinki can say anymore about this one.Author's response
LOL thank you, i guess!
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