(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-04-09Great chap! Dont forget to include some history on your characters to make them more well rounded. Like obviously Sky is good friends with Mikey...but why not Gerard. Was he just like Mikeys older creepy brother all this time but now she sees him differently. You dont need to write a paragraph about it either, just a few refernces here and there. Like 'Oh I cant believe Im sitting here with Gerard of all people...we were never close...' Or have Gerard say something to her about how things are different. What makes a character likeable is knowing whats motivating them to do what they do. You know your character...the auidence dosent. Writing its the hard part! (seriously youre doing great-keep going!)
Author's responsethank you for the great tips! i absolutely going to use them for the next chapters!
(#) MCR_dynamite 2007-04-11I love this story! Aw, that chapter made me smile in the 'Why can't Gerard hug ME?' way (if that's even possible!). Lol, that was quite sweet. I liked it!
Author's responseOhhh goodie!! that means I did something right if it made you feel something/smile.
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