Advent Children missing scene. Tseng and Elena, before Vincent finds them.
- This was a really well-written look at Tseng and Elena's captivity. There was just the right amount of detail and emotion and it was tasteful. Most other attempts to write about this that I've seen so far as just using it as excuse for some violent non-con, which is fine if that's what you want to read. Somebody had to put some dignity into the situation though, and I think you did it very well.
Author\'s Response: Thank you! It was kind of a tough piece to write, because I really did want to touch on how much they must have suffered, but I also didn't want to just, you know, write torture fic. I like the characters too much to want to strip them of their dignity like that. hugs them
- The bit with Tseng's hand was clever and just the right amount of gruesome. It really got across the desperation of the moment while allowing the two Turks to keep their cool, professional air. I believe this filled that gap in AC's storyline very well.
- I really liked this. This is the best approach to this particular gap in the movie that I've read so far. It doesn't go into huge details about torture, but it does convey the sense that Tseng and Elena went through a lot, and more was in store for them if they didn't act quickly.
Kudos for a sense of urgency and never letting us forget why these two are part of that awesome elite group known as the Turks.
Two things, tho' (and I'm being picky, so don't feel bad about it):
1) I'm not quite happy with how Tseng reacts to Vincent. Well, more that thing about he being repulsed by "what he is"... or something (sorry, kinda bad at quoting things). But, hey, I'm biased: I love Vince.
2) That last thing Vince said about contacting the company and arranging for a car... unless one of them had managed to keep a their phone, I'm not quite sure how Vincent went about that. Then again, they did appear rather randomly back at Edge, so -shrugs-
Anyway, that's my two cents. Like I said, I really like this. Good job!