(#) littlestar451 2007-06-05It's really good :-) I like the format alot. I'm going to pass on a little constructive crit. that I got when I first started writing :-) Separate the paragraphs with spaces:
Like that, it makes it easier to read and sometimes it makes it look longer :-) I luv the story and keep up the good work!
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