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HARRY POTTER AND THE FIRST YEAR (working title only)
(#) hubem 2007-07-18
My only complaint is that you put this in the summary and thus it takes up alot of room on my screen. If you put it as a prologue or something like that it would be much better. Also due to it being the summary as soon as I click on the link to your story I have the summary which is enormous repeated 7 times. Thats the other reason i'd ask you to put it in a prologue or authors notes or something.HARRY POTTER AND THE FIRST YEAR (working title only)
(#) lantana 2008-02-04
Your story leaves me breathless, so to speak, after only a few paragraphs. Do try to make shorter sentences, please.In spite of the promise your story shows, I'm not quite sure I'll continue reading if I have to strugle through paragrpah-length sentences all the time.
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