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Halloween.

by darkviolet 3 Reviews

Phantom of the opera and Jack are fighting...Why? And how Christine is involved?

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: G - Genres: Drama,Romance - Characters: Bob Bryar,Frank Iero,Gerard Way,Mikey Way,Ray Toro - Published: 2007/10/06 - Updated: 2007/10/06 - 2691 words - Complete

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  • you can keep my brother

    (#) -M- 2007-10-06 09:36:29 AM

    Friends lock themselves in rooms with motherfuckers just to set you a date.
    AHAHAHA, I've never looked at it that way...
    Great chapter... Update soon!

    Author's response

    aww thanks for reviewing!
    i know it's fiction but i wish i had a friend who'll do that for me...not set me up with a motherfucker but generally do something nice like that...

    aww thanks for reviewing!
    i know it's fiction but i wish i had a friend who'll do that for me...not set me up with a motherfucker but generally do something nice like that...
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) MCR_music_mad_girl 2007-10-06 11:18:33 AM

    oh my !
    i just read the last few chapters there now! and they are fucking awesome!
    she forgot her own wedding day?! how could she ?! all i can do is tut her right now..
    up date soon =]

    Author's response

    oh well things like that happen..usually to me but i bet there're loads of people who forgot their wedding date at some point...
    i just updated...yay!
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) winnie_55 2007-10-06 04:21:51 PM

    Yay, two more chapters! I love this story.Everytime something sweet happens something bad happens right away!

    Author's response

    oohh thanks so much! i try to keep things even, all good or all bad is boring...mix them up together and you get cool shit!
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) hopeanne 2007-10-08 03:46:41 AM

    This is my newest favorite chapter! But first, I loved the 'new' ending to the last chap. It was soooo sad. And Im glad Frankie saw it too...
    But that brings me to now- was Gerard at the party? Im not sure cause Frankie was, which means theyre not on tour. But the way those two are it wouldnt surprise me if he was off drinking somewhere with out her, or who knows what...I love/hate how you start chapters in the middle of scenes like that! ugh! too many unanswered questions!
    And now Cole just seems like a thousand times hotter. ~sighs~ ( I like him now...)
    And Frankie the hero!!! LOVE IT!
    Like I said- this ones my favorite.
    I guess this is the kinda style you write best in. I dont know what it would be called 'confusion'? I dont know. You also do sadness really well, but thats not to say that you shouldnt try to broaden your writing. I think that this confusion style works well cause its got just the right amount of thoughts blended with dialog and action. You should try to apply that 'formula' to a happy scene.
    My favorite lines had to be that paragraph where shes trying to 'sell' Ali to him and shes like 'she needs to be watched-great make her sound like a cheater' I actually went like HA! outloud when I read that line.

    Author's response

    i think i wrote it somewhere in the chapter, frank was sick like a week before his birthday so they let him spend it home while they continued touring, ya know, Frankie's usual sick leave...i got what you was saying like i should throw in more of what she's thinking in addition to what she was saying...i definitely tried to blend more thoughts in my latest chapter, i'm surprised i never really did it before but only when i had to write something funny and show the contrast between her thoughts and action which produced a comical relief. thanks for pointing that out to me cause i never noticed! ohh and i'm glad you have a fav chapter..but a new one? i never knew you had a favorite chapter in my story...

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