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Innocence Faded
(#) Alohawannabe 2007-11-21
Interesting so far, but it appears to cut-off in the middle of a word at the end.
Thanks for the story.
On to the next chapter...Author's response
it didn't just cut off the end of a word...it cut off most of the chapter. now I have to wait for it to clear the cache before I can figure out if I've fixed it.Innocence Faded
(#) Cateagle 2007-11-21
As of this writing, it still seems to cut off, this time at the end of a word, but not the thought it's part of.
What I've read is an excellent prologue for what you've got set up and while you've taken a few liberties with Imzadi, not that many (nowhere near the liberties the various ST script writers took with other aspects of the shows' backgrounds) and it's plausible. It does make Ginny and Molly's behavior that much more reprehensible, though.Author's response
I suggest looking it up on FFdotNet. there is a link to my profile there in my profile here. the second half is the better half, and has many important details, and my two favorite scenes aside from the post-Final Battle internal monologue.
as for Imzadi, my initial definition came from a half remembered reading of the book /Imzadi/. I only ever remember the word being used in Encounter at Farpoint and again by Thomas Riker in the first episode he appears in.Innocence Faded
(#) Cateagle 2007-11-23
It appears in a few other episodes, but not a tremendous number and I'd not say you've taken overmuch liberty with it (and, yes, I've read that novel, too). In this instance, it fits well.
I agree, the chapter on FFdotNet is definitely a better read and has some very good bits that aren't here. Are you going to try reposting it again or just send folk over there?
Author's response
I don't know. For now I'm giving up on Ficwad. It's not just the chapter being cut off. I submitted the exact same text to both sites.
My biggest problem is the formatting and editing on Ficwad. It's so much more intuitive on FF.Net. I may post the rest of Innocence Faded and AWiH on Ficwad eventually, but otherwise I don't plan on posting anything else here unless I write somethin that's NC-17 material. As of right now I have no plans for that, though.
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