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These Tears I Cry

never ceasing.

Category: Poetry - Rating: G - Genres: Angst, Drama - Characters:  - Published: 2005/05/10 - Updated: 2005/05/10 - 153 words - Complete

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• These Tears I Cry

  (#) ShadingInGrey 2005-05-16 12:02:14 PM

  Unfortunately, I'm not very good at writing poetry, so I don't know how useful my review will be. However, I thought this was really good - there was a strong connection with me. I thought 'salty waterfalls' was particularly strong.
  The only improvement I could possibly suggest - and I'm only pointing this out because I know you're supposed to suggest some improvement - is perhaps to avoid clichés.
  However, this is a very strong, intense piece of poetry which I thoroughly like. Thank you for sharing!
  Tania

  Author's response

  thank you for reading and reviewing!

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