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Zero.

by darkviolet 3 Reviews

How hard it is to turn back time?

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: G - Genres: Drama,Humor,Romance - Characters: Bob Bryar,Frank Iero,Gerard Way,Mikey Way,Ray Toro - Published: 2007/12/03 - Updated: 2007/12/03 - 2207 words - Complete

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  • you can keep my brother

    (#) winnie_55 2007-12-03 10:22:39 AM

    That's really scary, Gerard is talking like he's dying.
    Anyway, even though it was worrying, it was so good to read the bit where Gerard and Sky told each other how much they meant. They don't often seem to talk about how much they love each other.
    I also liked the bit where Sky was thinking about how she wanted to go back to when Gerard was just hers. That was a fantastic chapter again. I love this story. :-)

    Author's response

    yeah i know the story is kinda lacking in the romantic department but i swear i'm trying to get better at it! i try to throw bits and pieces of them 'loving' each other lol...anyway, thanks for the review, i found it very helpful like all your other reviews!
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) hopeanne 2007-12-03 10:24:36 AM

    It was a good chapter overall. A lot emotions in it... Im trying to sort it out in my head, so bear with me.
    I liked the beginning. the 'deep purple' line was cute... (darkviolet) lol.
    But rrrgh at Pete for betraying her like that! that stung! You speed through the hurt quickly though, I mean she went right to anger which is good. I mean it shows how badly it hit her, I mean the 'old' sky wouldve just ran and hid and I dunno maybe cried? okay maybe not cry cause shes not a crybaby but she is awfully immature sometimes, but this time she wasnt. And I liked that. It shows how much she really cares for Gerard and the guys that that was how much it hurt her, and it ties into the whole rude awakening, trust no one bit from the last chapter, which is the sad truth in life sometimes...
    Anyway, moving on. Petes an ass. Im impressed with Gerard though. I mean how he 'stopped' sky like that. Im sure he wanted nothing more to knock Pete on his ass to, especially for upsetting Sky, I mean like back in that scene with the 'flash us to get backstage jerks'. And how Bruce told them no and all that shit about the rules and crap. I mean Gerard gets it. He cant go knocking Pete out cause it would only make more shit, but that doesnt mean he doesnt want to... I think maybe thats whats missing in Gees reaction, I like the mushyness between them but he couldve mentioned somethign about him being mad too, I dont know...
    As for the mushyness.
    It was good. He made her zero on his list! lol. I see his point about it being before one but that was a really deep line. I mean that sums up their entire relationship. I mean I think you should change the name from you can keep my brother to Zero. thats how much I loved that line. I mean that is them. Shes zero... I mean the whole way they hide the fact that they are married and their whole relationship. She means soooo much to him that he puts her before one... but by doing it, it makes her zero... ahh! its just a paradox, its just one of those things that I could go on all day about it. so I'll stop now.
    and on a totally seperate note I am terrified of what Gerard is doing... I mean theres a lot of shit he can be doing that doenst 'smell' or taste and I just have this bad feeling...
    I remember an interview where he said he went to Japan with just the clothes on his back cause he didnt expect to come home, that he was that far sunken down and thats just what this is screaming at me and its very unsettling to see him saying 'goodbye' like that. I can only hope that Sky hears his cries for help before its too late...

    Author's response

    aw man you see things i didn't even think of, i just wrote that line because i thought it was sweet but you kinda pointed the other side of it! awesome!
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) bindie611 2007-12-04 04:03:29 AM

    i wish that it wasn't so sad. Pete's a loser, Gerard's like on drugs and suicidal or something... and frankie's stupid! haha. Frankies like the happy part of this chappy. :D
    Anyway moooreeeee

    Author's response

    aw frankie had like 1.5 sentences in this chapter and it's enough to brighten the whole scene!
  • you can keep my brother

    (#) _cranium_ 2007-12-07 08:38:22 AM

    sorry i'm late. i've had no access to the internet in the past few days.. or wait, maybe a week? this chapter was indescribeably (i've no idea how to spell that) amazing. i started reading the old chapters and you can totally see the improvement. you were already great back then but now you're on a whole different level.
    i liked the staring part in tihs chap. the way she suddenly noticed ti wasn't "her" gerard or the "old gerard" staring back at her, and i wouldn't be suprised if gerard was thinking about the same thing when he was staring blankly at her.

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