Harry's world ends as everyone he loves is killed when the Death Eaters attack Bill and Fleur's wedding. When he finishes his revenge and takes the next step, what waits for him on the other side o...
- It is hard to rate this story as we only have the prologue. However, it is an interesting concept, somewhat reminiscent of Clell's "Merlin's Reaper".
I wonder what awaits Harry. Ever heard the phrase: "Hell couldn't hold me and Heaven wouldn't let me in?" How would the most formidable killer in history redeem his soul? That's one possibility anyway. In any case, I do hope that this is not a redo-type story.
I'll be looking out for the next chapter.
(#) Void_Sorcerer 2008-02-22 10:14:03 PMThis has got to be one of the worst, and stupidest pieces of fandom I have ever read. Hell, I'd give you maybe a .o5 out of 5, just for effort.
Firstly, from the sound of it, you're taking the beginning from someone else's story, and if that's the case, you're really un-original. Especially with the fact of how bad it sucks.
462 Death Eaters, are you kidding me? Where is there evidence in the book that such a huge number exists? If there were that freaken many, why hand't the entire world already fallen? Surely 400 Death Eaters, plus Voldemort himself could have at least conquered Britain?
Dementors arive first huh? Well now, that's quite the trip for them to make, Britain to France, but I guess that's at least semi-believable.
"In less time than it took him to draw his wand, the wedding party was dead. Mr. and Mrs. Weasley fell next never to rise again. Hermione shoved him out of the way of a Killing Curse, to be hit by it herself. From the ground he saw Neville and Luna fall to the Dementors."
You're telling me, that in less time then it takes a wizard to draw a wand. (Mayhaps 2 seconds!?) That the entire party was dead. A party that consists of the Order of the Pheonix and DA memebers? You're fucked in the head. Especially as the first wave was 35 dementors.
"He snapped. A cold black fury engulfed him, and something happened to his magic. From the ground he raised his wand to cast a reducto at the nearest Death Eater when his magic leaped from his body and devoured the life of the Death Eater, and Harry’s magic increased. Then his magic leapt to another Death Eater and did the same. Again his magic increased. Unbidden his magic killed all 35 of the Death Eaters, and added their magic to his own. The Dementors fled, unable to affect him."
So not only do you remove Harry's weakness towards dementors in a paragraph, you also make him God, well done! (That's sarcasm, you moron)
"It took almost 2 minutes for Voldemort to make his appearance with his inner circle. By then Harry was in full control, he put up anti-apparition and anti-portkey wards with athought and dismembered the Lucius Malfoy right in front of Voldemort’s eyes. Then the Lestranges. Then Dolohov, then Snape, then the rest. Only Voldemort remained. He screamed threats at Harry, who ignored him. Harry used his new level of power to sever Voldemort’s connection to his horcruxes before taking 6 hours to kill him, and added his magic to his own."
Yeah, I can see how 2 minutes would be a huge amount of time; especially when everyone there, (but Harry) died in .5 seconds...
Harry threw up Anti-Portkey/Apparition huh? Hell he can't even Aparate, or create a Portkey, but he can throw up the counter?
I'm so impressed you can kill off an entire Inner-circle of Death Eaters and Voldemort in one paragraph. Some "Big-bad Dark Lord" huh?
Severing his link to the Horcruxes... you've got to be shitting me. But of course, Harry used his, and I quote "New level of powah!!!"
You're a complete fuck-up, and the people whom have previously review and said this was "Good, Nice, interesting" are nearly as stupid as you.
I know what's next! A lovey-dovey meeting with his Parents/Sirius/Dumbledore/Godric Gryffindor/Merlin! Then ater a couple cups of tea, a nice long orgy between Harry/Ginny/Hermione/Luna (I wouldn't doubt you're into slash either, so might as well throw in Ron/Nevil)
Do yourself a favor, remove this shit from the site, write a will, and slit your wrist.
- Hey, Dude,
Tell VOID_SORCERER to go and spend some time getting himself a life. I checked out his(?) so-called work, and some of it is rated in negative numbers by HIS REVIEWERS, so he has no grounds on which to criticise YOU.
Now it is true that this is full of sterotypes and cliches. But then Isaac Asimov's early work was no better. He lived to see 700+ books of his in Print, and that was before the Internet, too. Not to mention thousands of articles, reviews, short stories, etc that he wrote.
There is no such ting as a failure who kept on trying. So kept on trying. You may hate this story someday, but the only way you become an experienced author, is by writing.
SO, write on.