by SoccerDevil22
1 Reviews
Category: Harry Potter -
Rating: R - Genres: Angst,Drama - Characters: -
Warnings: [!!!] [V] [?] - Published: 2008/04/10 - Updated: 2008/04/10 - 3776 words
Reviews
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(#) melferd 2008-04-15 03:30:28 PM
Your story is intriguing and different. However;
you are affected by others, you both cause and effect others. Please, get some grammar help, beat your beta about the head and shoulders with a copy of the Little, Brown handbook.
It distracts from an otherwise delightful tale.