OK, this is a very interesting bit of writing. It's kind of reminding me a bit of an old Kinsfire where Harry disappears to be found by Hermione, Luna, Ginny, Tonks and Ron and Luna is really messed up.
You're is better on a different level because it's not weighed down with overly-poetic stuff that can take away from the power of the story. I'm curious as to what color eyes Luna has received and whether or not she actually will know it's Harry upon kissing him? Please update soon.
Geovanni Luciano