you should add at least one more chapter from her point of veiw. but other then that this fan fic was amazing, some of them that you read are miss-spelled and unorginised but this one made you feel for the charecter which is hard to do knowing that the person your reading or writing about is a real human being and you don't really know them. i've read fan fics with 50 chapters that don't give as much depth as your one chapter. so thank you for posting this you have made me night.
Author's response
Thank you for your review. That made me feel really good. & While it isn't exactly the same, there is a follow up story to this one, showing things from her point of view. It's called 'Be My Escape', and I'd love to know what you think of it.