Review for He; You

He; You

(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-06-20

I liked how you used the bold font to empahsis certain words. but I dont get why the fourth one is SHEETS? and OBJECT? I mean sheets is a noun. All the other bold words are adverbs? adjectives? I dont F'ing know. I told you Im not a techincal person but something seems funky there. I would boldface 'pushes'.It seems to blend better with the other words. But overall very very good!!! You should consider posting some of your more poetic stuff in the poetry catagory. You may get more helpful feedback there!----xoxo

Author's response

oh, yeah i made a mistake, i THINK i meant to bold that lol. ill change it ur right! =)

thank you!