Review for Travelers' Return

Travelers' Return

(#) Reader458 2007-06-23

Nice to see this story on a site where more can find it (I've been reading it on Atlantis before). But you seem to have missed putting up chapter 23 where Nabiki beats Cologne and the Senshi desides to go to Nerima. Other than that it's a good story and I cant wait to learn more about the real Senshi history. (Though perhaps you should rewrite the Senshi meating Selena, they took the shredding of their history a little to quitly, not demanding proof or protest. Perhaps splitting up the introduction of the training and the history-lession into two occasions so that they are more relaxed and more off balance if that make sense. I mean that they have learnt more about the real demon-hunting and are more avare of their own faults.) Also the line "The Sailor Senshi gasped in astonishment. Mars's face showed that she did not believe that she was hearing, but her shock kept her silent." between "Collectively, those slaves were called the Sailor Senshi. My Sire liked to joke and call me Queen Serenity the First." and "Selena snorted at the memory, "A queen of slaves is still but a slave... But yes, I was his first slave.... " is missing from the last chapter.
Good luck with the writing.
Christoffer