that's just soooo sad!!! but you writing is really good. i could picture the scene so well i felt like i'm in it! can't wait to see what happens! update!
Author's response
Planning on updating tonight. I am glad you could picture it, that was what I had been going for. My friend said it was so boring it pained her to read it, and I had hoped this wouldn;t be other's responses. Glad it isn't.