This is a very good story, near perfect. Hell, perfect. I like the fact that Harry isn't the stereotypical Sith Lord. More like the Revan that was mentioned in KOTOR2. A calculating tyrant.
Mara Jade, the hand of the emperor, she kinda looks like Harry's mother doesnt she? Beautiful with red hair and green eyes. Very interesting choice.
Anyway, good job. I look forward to seeing more from this soon.